tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post1969999420682402892..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Thanksgiving buffet kick starts the holidays (EDIT)Regina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-1234049991540248722015-12-03T19:39:32.025-08:002015-12-03T19:39:32.025-08:00Good job! Just one thing, "with foods such as...Good job! Just one thing, "with foods such as, turkey, ham...", no comma is needed after "as".Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00539629333194858609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-19382172189758344462015-11-30T21:39:49.484-08:002015-11-30T21:39:49.484-08:00Great edit! I couldn't find an mistakes and I ...Great edit! I couldn't find an mistakes and I like the headline that you came up with.Michaela Olberdinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07004288344085279295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-49202400612194376332015-11-30T17:33:39.365-08:002015-11-30T17:33:39.365-08:00Good job Bree!! Good headline too!Good job Bree!! Good headline too!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07420193873114415751noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-86723185709827200852015-11-30T08:24:45.614-08:002015-11-30T08:24:45.614-08:00Good story. Good edits. Good food. Good story. Good edits. Good food. Trevinedelmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00644014434071085284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-28294447134123478662015-11-30T07:39:59.828-08:002015-11-30T07:39:59.828-08:00I like the headline change that you made to this e...I like the headline change that you made to this edit. You made great and needed changes. Good job, Bree!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546756473875671715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-11959488879721811092015-11-28T21:05:06.811-08:002015-11-28T21:05:06.811-08:00Good job Bri! Good job Bri! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03530664019624256517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-68449718745624719262015-11-27T20:18:49.488-08:002015-11-27T20:18:49.488-08:00Good job overall, the problem is only the punctuat...Good job overall, the problem is only the punctuationAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08986458704170497564noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-29968778769954072822015-11-25T09:08:30.697-08:002015-11-25T09:08:30.697-08:00Good job getting more than one quote. It adds more...Good job getting more than one quote. It adds more to the story. I like it!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11693627680739888458noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-88214850504519638122015-11-23T17:45:16.754-08:002015-11-23T17:45:16.754-08:00"It was a transitional Thanksgiving buffet wi..."It was a transitional Thanksgiving buffet with foods such as, turkey, ham, potatoes and cream corn" I think you meant it was a traditional Thanksgiving buffet. Cathryne Klisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156237965938779149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-2348148532240201742015-11-23T10:42:09.391-08:002015-11-23T10:42:09.391-08:00You corrected the dates and headline, which was go...You corrected the dates and headline, which was good! However, the amounts of money still need to be corrected as well as the quote attributions. You also repeat "there" twice in the third paragraph's last sentence. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18117447719940392999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-74361252283390933962015-11-23T08:18:24.152-08:002015-11-23T08:18:24.152-08:00Good edit! Again, the quote needs to be fixed like...Good edit! Again, the quote needs to be fixed like Kelly and Kara stated. Also, get rid of the "th" on the dates, those don't need to be used in AP style. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15721144001840493511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-83801601230466292462015-11-22T15:53:40.989-08:002015-11-22T15:53:40.989-08:00I also noticed the period after the quote, so chan...I also noticed the period after the quote, so change that. Also, in the first paragraph combine the third and fourth sentence so it's not so choppy. Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08981167437803624417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-21969470132818996922015-11-22T05:12:36.526-08:002015-11-22T05:12:36.526-08:00I would add a comma instead of period after David ...I would add a comma instead of period after David Cox quote. Also said should be lowercase. Nice headline. The 6th paragraph should be "coming up, it is" ....Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18105774946599752560noreply@blogger.com