tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post2791229252807706223..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): The goose, the gander, and the eggs.Regina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-32982495768322779432014-09-04T15:00:18.440-07:002014-09-04T15:00:18.440-07:00Yeah there really wasn't much to fix because i...Yeah there really wasn't much to fix because it was so well done the first time. But I do like what you have changed, it made it that much better. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02145349941021806928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-39677355857073421602014-09-04T09:24:01.651-07:002014-09-04T09:24:01.651-07:00Amazing! I like the way you changed. You made the ...Amazing! I like the way you changed. You made the it more clear and funny.Zai Yujiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00224768483613303556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-59306531192613718132014-09-04T08:34:29.930-07:002014-09-04T08:34:29.930-07:00The title change was great. I thought it would be ...The title change was great. I thought it would be difficult to make this story any better, but you managed to do just that. Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08342334703162607135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-68258353282974003262014-09-04T08:30:54.115-07:002014-09-04T08:30:54.115-07:00I enjoy how the action rose and then fell back to ...I enjoy how the action rose and then fell back to its tranquil setting. This was a good read.Brianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12023996784574735793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-88113519316742148922014-09-04T08:28:51.347-07:002014-09-04T08:28:51.347-07:00A really good title. This made an already great st...A really good title. This made an already great story even better.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03729556269449028539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-4903756619693135392014-09-04T08:24:09.471-07:002014-09-04T08:24:09.471-07:00I like the changed to this! Don't you spell ou...I like the changed to this! Don't you spell out the state name though? I thought that was a new change this year? Either way great job! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-69146254724190626232014-09-04T08:23:26.555-07:002014-09-04T08:23:26.555-07:00I really like the new title!! It's very clever...I really like the new title!! It's very clever and capturing! Im glad you kept the descriptive details that made this piece great originally. Sarah Seuellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03704460586168182749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-18933433494050288952014-09-04T08:21:27.286-07:002014-09-04T08:21:27.286-07:00Great job keeping the same story but tweaking it ...Great job keeping the same story but tweaking it to be told in a different way!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10917843282124410508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-77758848449662079012014-08-28T15:17:47.226-07:002014-08-28T15:17:47.226-07:00Can we just take a moment to really appreciate the...Can we just take a moment to really appreciate the new headline, so cute and clever! Johanna I think you did a fine editing the story. Although I prefer the perspective of the original, I think you did a good job in maintaining its integrity and still wrote a great story.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00246883693786513243noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-13604845999637184492014-08-26T12:23:16.102-07:002014-08-26T12:23:16.102-07:00Both of you did a great job. I did like the differ...Both of you did a great job. I did like the different perspective you gave. It made it seem as though the reader is looking through that characters eyes, watching everything take place.JennFunkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12019608744038730627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-47772371451549101802014-08-25T20:09:43.632-07:002014-08-25T20:09:43.632-07:00You did a great job editing, Johanna. I like that ...You did a great job editing, Johanna. I like that you changed the perspective but kept the details in the story. I like your headline a lot. You both did a fantastic job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07879780447247621474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-84714635095775545062014-08-24T19:10:09.268-07:002014-08-24T19:10:09.268-07:00Great job on the edits, Johanna! You added some ne...Great job on the edits, Johanna! You added some necessary words (like including Kan. in the first paragraph), but you also kept the descriptive words that Emily wrote, which made the story clear and interesting! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12137679357718093245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-15866226691138750392014-08-23T04:38:07.456-07:002014-08-23T04:38:07.456-07:00You're such a good writer, there wasn't mu...You're such a good writer, there wasn't much to fix! Thanks, I'm glad to have you as my teammate! :)Johanna Greerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253194396023284583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-9908883526487836302014-08-22T13:23:03.724-07:002014-08-22T13:23:03.724-07:00Thank you for not completely tearing this apart! H...Thank you for not completely tearing this apart! Haha. I like how you changed the perspective as if someone was actually watching the events unfold. I also like your new headline, very catchy! Good work, teammate! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06914354219737276049noreply@blogger.com