tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post2826023267387338503..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Run to Where the Light Can't Find YouRegina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-73291409197130095372014-10-06T13:22:48.481-07:002014-10-06T13:22:48.481-07:00Good story, excellent use of descriptive words. I ...Good story, excellent use of descriptive words. I did not see any editing problems and I agree with Monica, I wish you could continue the story! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12021415795650825923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-63312831944077621042014-10-05T14:06:41.885-07:002014-10-05T14:06:41.885-07:00Great descriptions! I hope one day I can use words...Great descriptions! I hope one day I can use words like you.Zai Yujiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00224768483613303556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-83170830110322241502014-10-02T17:33:20.963-07:002014-10-02T17:33:20.963-07:00I love your choice of words and how descriptive yo...I love your choice of words and how descriptive you were! Good job. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12137679357718093245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-88343624708990972972014-10-01T17:41:24.245-07:002014-10-01T17:41:24.245-07:00I wish there was a continuation! I'd love to f...I wish there was a continuation! I'd love to find out what happens next. Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07879780447247621474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-967738994028563182014-09-25T10:29:56.874-07:002014-09-25T10:29:56.874-07:00I'm very curious about what they were doing in...I'm very curious about what they were doing in the woods and what the other guy agreed to. Your short excerpt makes me want to know more!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10917843282124410508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-55362226796272772362014-09-22T21:17:33.878-07:002014-09-22T21:17:33.878-07:00That kept me on the edge of my seat. Nice story an...That kept me on the edge of my seat. Nice story and very good descriptions.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08342334703162607135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-45641508965663699232014-09-17T10:26:13.512-07:002014-09-17T10:26:13.512-07:00This seriously reminded me of some of the novels I...This seriously reminded me of some of the novels I read. You used and extensive vocabulary with great descriptions. Well done!JennFunkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12019608744038730627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-38590638022914422282014-09-16T20:54:42.213-07:002014-09-16T20:54:42.213-07:00I love the descriptive details you used throughout...I love the descriptive details you used throughout. Your word choice is excellent and provides a vision. I enjoyed it a lot. Very few errors. Some of the communication between the two boys was confusing, and could possibly be worded differently to be more clear. Other than that it was great!Sarah Seuellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03704460586168182749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-57888160094951864852014-09-14T15:02:58.792-07:002014-09-14T15:02:58.792-07:00Very interesting story! Your use of action and des...Very interesting story! Your use of action and descriptive words kept me hooked until the end. I particularly like the sentence, " A spotlight panned across the trees trying to find them, but their black hoodies blended seamlessly with the night." Blended seamlessly. Love it!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06914354219737276049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-2530941100461218702014-09-12T15:40:38.056-07:002014-09-12T15:40:38.056-07:00Good job on this story, I feel like I know this ki...Good job on this story, I feel like I know this kid who's trying to keep out of trouble. Plus, good title.Johanna Greerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253194396023284583noreply@blogger.com