tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post4634196728153603661..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Kansas state government taking away from the middle-classRegina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-1887903647246306712015-12-03T20:00:21.613-08:002015-12-03T20:00:21.613-08:00a good topic to read. but like they said watching ...a good topic to read. but like they said watching the AP style.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08986458704170497564noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-3947163424325470472015-11-30T18:39:04.471-08:002015-11-30T18:39:04.471-08:00Adjust your writing to fit AP style criteria. Othe...Adjust your writing to fit AP style criteria. Otherwise an interesting topic that will affect all residents. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18105774946599752560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-43450187373831407992015-11-30T16:01:46.607-08:002015-11-30T16:01:46.607-08:00"Angering" is a pretty strong, opinionat..."Angering" is a pretty strong, opinionated word. As everyone else has said, try to stay as impartial as possible to keep your credibility.SydneyLHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547950717844365741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-24442932419982596522015-11-30T16:01:43.335-08:002015-11-30T16:01:43.335-08:00"Angering" is a pretty strong, opinionat..."Angering" is a pretty strong, opinionated word. As everyone else has said, try to stay as impartial as possible to keep your credibility.SydneyLHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547950717844365741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-1256191102849349652015-11-20T07:25:26.653-08:002015-11-20T07:25:26.653-08:00Comes off biased, but you provided a lot of inform...Comes off biased, but you provided a lot of information for the story. Remove yourself and your opinion from the story and it will be a good article! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15721144001840493511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-24632112032728497652015-11-07T12:34:44.869-08:002015-11-07T12:34:44.869-08:00Never include yourself in a news story. This harms...Never include yourself in a news story. This harms your credibility and ability to remain entirely objective. I thought the subject matter was interesting. Adjust your headline and find a new verb -- I don't think "taking away" is working for me as a reader. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18117447719940392999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-7468101409933193302015-11-05T05:26:47.951-08:002015-11-05T05:26:47.951-08:00Good edit. I am pretty sure the dollar about in mi...Good edit. I am pretty sure the dollar about in million should be spelled out for AP style. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07420193873114415751noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-67835159644367313942015-11-02T11:58:48.987-08:002015-11-02T11:58:48.987-08:00Interesting read, but omit the opinions and write ...Interesting read, but omit the opinions and write only about the facts. Be impartial!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08981167437803624417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-58022540007671139092015-10-21T08:11:17.231-07:002015-10-21T08:11:17.231-07:00Other than the opinion part (as seen above), very ...Other than the opinion part (as seen above), very nice work. Trevinedelmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00644014434071085284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-16094455939948290182015-10-21T07:51:22.442-07:002015-10-21T07:51:22.442-07:00You have a lot of opinions in your post. Try to st...You have a lot of opinions in your post. Try to stay away from opinions and stick to the facts. Cathryne Klisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156237965938779149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-59069332099031706412015-10-18T21:34:13.096-07:002015-10-18T21:34:13.096-07:00"angering" I feel like you should use a ..."angering" I feel like you should use a different word than this. This really pertains to me since I live in my own house of campus. I know the struggle of paying my own bills.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04156632950972041591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-23356895214994613832015-10-18T20:05:09.815-07:002015-10-18T20:05:09.815-07:00I agree with all of the above stated comments. The...I agree with all of the above stated comments. The only different comment I would add is to begin your lead with information other than the date!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-1548576315192997822015-10-18T20:04:50.252-07:002015-10-18T20:04:50.252-07:00I agree with all of the above stated comments. The...I agree with all of the above stated comments. The only different comment I would add is to begin your lead with information other than the date!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-9734794097226136692015-10-06T15:02:10.038-07:002015-10-06T15:02:10.038-07:00There are a couple minor errors in this post such ...There are a couple minor errors in this post such as the date and the money amount. I thought the post was interesting but it doesn't really pertain to Washburn's campus. Overall, I thought you did great! Michaela Olberdinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07004288344085279295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-91537089951784732602015-10-03T18:33:53.928-07:002015-10-03T18:33:53.928-07:00I am not sure, but when listing a dollar amount I ...I am not sure, but when listing a dollar amount I think its supposed to be $XX million. I don't know if $XX M is allowed by AP? Also, in the last paragraph "we as a people" seem to be a grammatical error. I would consider re-wording that. "Kansan's" would fit perfectly in it space I believe. <br /><br />I like the topic, and actually just learned about this by reading your article. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03530664019624256517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-30732513615764686622015-10-01T23:26:53.543-07:002015-10-01T23:26:53.543-07:00Since there is a specific date in September, it sh...Since there is a specific date in September, it should read Sept. 24 instead of spelling it out. I think that was a great topic to write about. But, just remember when you are writing to remain unbiased and not take a stance on the issue you are writing about in your article!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546756473875671715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-30109222867950836652015-09-25T09:09:43.960-07:002015-09-25T09:09:43.960-07:00Try to stay impartial as much as possible when wri...Try to stay impartial as much as possible when writing an article. You want the reader to come up with their own conclusions. Good ideas just be sure you are using AP style!<br /><br />This is a very relevant topic to Washburn because Washburn has so many nontraditional students. It will be interesting to continue to follow Westar Energy's plans. Unfortunately, Westar Energy has an advantage because as of right now there is no competition (monopoly).Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03491079946480679001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-7647291888447295072015-09-25T09:01:39.876-07:002015-09-25T09:01:39.876-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03491079946480679001noreply@blogger.com