tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post5494078272334325274..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Edited: The visit of a lifetime Regina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-47785961814487273052014-12-02T12:52:36.612-08:002014-12-02T12:52:36.612-08:00I like the change to the headline and the edits yo...I like the change to the headline and the edits you have made work well. Nice job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16174036650302809275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-36676869820307161142014-11-06T13:58:20.332-08:002014-11-06T13:58:20.332-08:00I agree with everyone else. The headline is more o...I agree with everyone else. The headline is more of a title now and you had a tough story to edit. I do like what you managed to do with it.Brianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12023996784574735793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-166981279210525172014-11-05T23:19:24.998-08:002014-11-05T23:19:24.998-08:00The original story is looks perfect. If I were you...The original story is looks perfect. If I were you, I have no idea how to edit it. You did a great job. I more like the new headline.Zai Yujiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00224768483613303556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-24299577381021066192014-10-27T12:35:36.648-07:002014-10-27T12:35:36.648-07:00Other than the headline being changed to more of a...Other than the headline being changed to more of a title than a headline I still think you did good job editing a well written story. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12021415795650825923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-71407557442674507062014-10-23T16:31:50.137-07:002014-10-23T16:31:50.137-07:00I'm afraid I have nothing to say that hasn'...I'm afraid I have nothing to say that hasn't already been said. You had a tough job editing an already good story, but I think your changes were well done.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00246883693786513243noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-20441806020375861752014-10-23T06:59:33.970-07:002014-10-23T06:59:33.970-07:00I like that the edits didn't hinder the story,...I like that the edits didn't hinder the story, but actually made it more clear---as if that were even possible. I don't know how I feel about the headlines... The last one was more like a headline, but this one was more inviting. Grrr...Sarah Seuellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03704460586168182749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-55870996072983732992014-10-22T19:59:30.126-07:002014-10-22T19:59:30.126-07:00I like the headline change and I agree with everyo...I like the headline change and I agree with everyone else. Monica is an excellent writer so the subtle changes didn't really impact the story much but they were nice. Good job... it can't be easy editing stories that are done so well!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-9302814217015677772014-10-22T10:45:24.475-07:002014-10-22T10:45:24.475-07:00I agree with Emily. I like your title but I like t...I agree with Emily. I like your title but I like the first one better because it is more like a headline. Other than that I love the changes that you made to this story, even though it was hard to edit because there wasn't much that needed to be done. I love the voice and imagery of the story. It was very interesting, easy to follow, and captivating. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02145349941021806928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-2083694798809505762014-10-21T13:50:50.224-07:002014-10-21T13:50:50.224-07:00I agree with the others that this story would have...I agree with the others that this story would have been hard to edit, but I think you did a nice job with changing a few things around and making it flow a little better! I do think your change to the headline made it more of a "title." I think Monica's is more headline-ish (I know that is not a word) because it includes both a subject and a verb. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06914354219737276049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-70659373110082111532014-10-21T10:04:43.657-07:002014-10-21T10:04:43.657-07:00Due to the fact that Monica is an excellent writer...Due to the fact that Monica is an excellent writer, I am sure this story was a challenge to edit. However, I think you added some changes that were really beneficial to the story. Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08342334703162607135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-66985329087301813622014-10-21T07:13:27.811-07:002014-10-21T07:13:27.811-07:00I like how you condensed the story down a bit and ...I like how you condensed the story down a bit and added some necessary words that made the story more clear. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12137679357718093245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-44023500988302831302014-10-20T12:04:37.731-07:002014-10-20T12:04:37.731-07:00I like this title better as well. There wasn't...I like this title better as well. There wasn't really anything that absolutely needed to be changed so you did a good job editing.JennFunkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12019608744038730627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-57439911104583161562014-10-19T07:54:58.103-07:002014-10-19T07:54:58.103-07:00Good job on the edits. I like the new title better...Good job on the edits. I like the new title better.Johanna Greerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253194396023284583noreply@blogger.com