tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post5546815513892160948..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Chartwells contract affects future students [edit]Regina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-9640399610045297472015-12-03T20:02:50.196-08:002015-12-03T20:02:50.196-08:00Nice edit! I think you meant "living" in...Nice edit! I think you meant "living" in this phrase though: "While leaving in..."Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00539629333194858609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-75982983840358089612015-12-01T09:39:18.245-08:002015-12-01T09:39:18.245-08:00I like this edit. It is not as biased as the first...I like this edit. It is not as biased as the first article. Good job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03491079946480679001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-89317072411361451272015-11-30T21:05:33.327-08:002015-11-30T21:05:33.327-08:00Great edit!! I like that the opinions were taken o...Great edit!! I like that the opinions were taken out. The information was simple and straight to the point, which makes it easier for the reader.Michaela Olberdinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07004288344085279295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-54144245761105751212015-11-30T20:23:47.024-08:002015-11-30T20:23:47.024-08:00Great edit! I agree with Justin, it does seem a bi...Great edit! I agree with Justin, it does seem a bit short. I like the headline change, though!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546756473875671715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-53936098647456434592015-11-30T19:02:56.341-08:002015-11-30T19:02:56.341-08:00Good edit, the story seems short. I would add some...Good edit, the story seems short. I would add some more text about different meal plans.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04156632950972041591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-83336319380037741362015-11-30T16:39:26.203-08:002015-11-30T16:39:26.203-08:00Headline is much better!Headline is much better!SydneyLHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547950717844365741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-11335113776027526382015-11-30T08:11:33.406-08:002015-11-30T08:11:33.406-08:00Short story. Good, relevant topic. Short story. Good, relevant topic. Trevinedelmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00644014434071085284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-50107550894846156342015-11-27T20:53:29.800-08:002015-11-27T20:53:29.800-08:00Good edit! the healine is very goodGood edit! the healine is very goodAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08986458704170497564noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-29095326961787584422015-11-20T08:52:50.355-08:002015-11-20T08:52:50.355-08:00Love the edit! The main sentence I wanted changed ...Love the edit! The main sentence I wanted changed was rewritten! Well done!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15721144001840493511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-23462198013835022792015-11-07T13:38:54.772-08:002015-11-07T13:38:54.772-08:00So much better! Pretty much all the changes I sugg...So much better! Pretty much all the changes I suggested were made! I have no other comments except for good job! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18117447719940392999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-25449707873051268942015-11-05T20:40:30.370-08:002015-11-05T20:40:30.370-08:00Very nice edits, this flows much, much better than...Very nice edits, this flows much, much better than the first post. As the other ladies said, leaving should be living. Cathryne Klisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156237965938779149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-90222530091233685892015-11-05T13:02:19.994-08:002015-11-05T13:02:19.994-08:00I like that you changed the headline. The original...I like that you changed the headline. The original, was miswritten. Great editAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03530664019624256517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-70572777898467304322015-11-04T19:35:30.989-08:002015-11-04T19:35:30.989-08:00I thought this was a very strong and straight forw...I thought this was a very strong and straight forward edit. I like that you took out the opinion part of the article and made it accredited to the general Washburn student body. The only mistake I saw was "leaving" as well. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-2637644628344177602015-11-02T15:58:11.915-08:002015-11-02T15:58:11.915-08:00Nice edit. In the third paragraph, change leaving ...Nice edit. In the third paragraph, change leaving to living. Otherwise, very straight forward and of importance to students.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18105774946599752560noreply@blogger.com