tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post5985611137608930408..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Warrior's arrival moves manyRegina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-23818344809605046612014-09-06T20:54:53.021-07:002014-09-06T20:54:53.021-07:00I love the title of this story! The story itself i...I love the title of this story! The story itself is really great and very touching and moving like others have said. Its something that a lot of people can relate to and it is definitely a story people will want to read. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02145349941021806928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-7867755175209275072014-09-04T12:43:09.713-07:002014-09-04T12:43:09.713-07:00I thought you did a good job with the story. I enj...I thought you did a good job with the story. I enjoyed the humanizing details like the soldier being nervous about flying.Brianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12023996784574735793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-84351159636265275332014-09-04T09:31:40.812-07:002014-09-04T09:31:40.812-07:00This is a moving story, I love it! Family is the m...This is a moving story, I love it! Family is the most important thing. Zai Yujiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00224768483613303556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-3367428740645839702014-09-04T08:42:02.086-07:002014-09-04T08:42:02.086-07:00A really touching story. Very descriptive and vivi...A really touching story. Very descriptive and vivid, not to mention well-written.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03729556269449028539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-67786012799057038482014-09-04T08:21:45.269-07:002014-09-04T08:21:45.269-07:00Wonderful story! It was very emotional, and I felt...Wonderful story! It was very emotional, and I felt like I was there. That would have been a great moment to witness.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08342334703162607135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-25305482057507790432014-09-04T08:21:27.662-07:002014-09-04T08:21:27.662-07:00I love the descriptive detail, the headline might ...I love the descriptive detail, the headline might need a little tweaking, but I think overall its really well written and its a tear jerker!Sarah Seuellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03704460586168182749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-39165549276782720832014-09-01T17:50:33.746-07:002014-09-01T17:50:33.746-07:00Great job, Monica! The story is very well written ...Great job, Monica! The story is very well written and I can tell that you included as many details as possible. I loved how you kept the two teddy bears involved in the story, almost making them characters. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12137679357718093245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-50415940010525177182014-09-01T15:14:38.509-07:002014-09-01T15:14:38.509-07:00That was such a great moment to capture! You used ...That was such a great moment to capture! You used vivid vocabulary that placed me right at the airport. Great story, Monica!JennFunkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12019608744038730627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-18807108874561185412014-09-01T14:48:26.575-07:002014-09-01T14:48:26.575-07:00Great story, it had me tearing up as well. It was ...Great story, it had me tearing up as well. It was very well written, and I felt like I could see it happening. :)Johanna Greerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253194396023284583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-3287043917546389292014-08-31T10:02:56.453-07:002014-08-31T10:02:56.453-07:00Fantastic job, Monica! What a wonderful moment in ...Fantastic job, Monica! What a wonderful moment in time to witness. It really is the little things that make life beautiful. Very descriptive and very well written! I noticed that you already seem to have a good handle on correct comma usage in AP style (specifically when it comes to nonrestrictive and restrictive parts of a sentence.) That's something I've been working on and paying more attention to since starting this class. Great work! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06914354219737276049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-53017189510865600892014-08-28T15:26:35.224-07:002014-08-28T15:26:35.224-07:00Okay so I'm a big softie; this is the second s...Okay so I'm a big softie; this is the second story to have me tear up. With that being said, I think that shows how you did a great job capturing this moment and the emotions with it. Good Job Monica!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00246883693786513243noreply@blogger.com