tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post5997264456745512895..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Memories cannot be abandonedRegina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-39169885474883131452014-12-02T12:44:13.355-08:002014-12-02T12:44:13.355-08:00The edits you have made help the story and I like ...The edits you have made help the story and I like the title as well. Nice job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16174036650302809275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-1426355215641645632014-12-01T11:42:35.856-08:002014-12-01T11:42:35.856-08:00The story didn't really need much editing to b...The story didn't really need much editing to begin with so I didn't notice very many things that you changed, but what you did change was some of the errors I noticed in the original so good job at catching those. I like the headline change but it doesn't really read like a headline. I think you should add another verb in there or switch it up a little bit. If this story was for a magazine or a book I think it would be find but if it was for a newspaper or something I would like the headline to be a little different, but thats just my opinion. Other than that I thought the story was great! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02145349941021806928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-55242442335086267562014-11-13T10:54:03.852-08:002014-11-13T10:54:03.852-08:00The headline was a nice change. The edits were sma...The headline was a nice change. The edits were small, but well done.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00246883693786513243noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-34030883167886616852014-11-10T20:34:51.028-08:002014-11-10T20:34:51.028-08:00I imagine this one was tough to edit, but your cha...I imagine this one was tough to edit, but your changes worked well with the story. Good job.Brianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12023996784574735793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-62137610460431777892014-11-06T08:37:56.241-08:002014-11-06T08:37:56.241-08:00Great job! I really like the headline change. Alth...Great job! I really like the headline change. Although the changes were small they really made a subtle change to the story. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-19258880618955058382014-11-06T05:17:18.008-08:002014-11-06T05:17:18.008-08:00I know this story was hard to edit, but the change...I know this story was hard to edit, but the changes you made were small and improved the story as a whole. I like the new title, but I think its a little elusive, I wasn't sure what the story would be about. Otherwise, great edit!Sarah Seuellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03704460586168182749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-6294508334186407202014-11-05T18:10:55.685-08:002014-11-05T18:10:55.685-08:00Great edits! Like everyone else, I think your titl...Great edits! Like everyone else, I think your title is an improvement! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12137679357718093245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-33282917632693880262014-11-05T10:06:40.095-08:002014-11-05T10:06:40.095-08:00I like the changes that you made to the story and ...I like the changes that you made to the story and the headline. You did a great job editing a very good story. Nice job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08342334703162607135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-26352176224739445672014-11-05T07:35:03.446-08:002014-11-05T07:35:03.446-08:00I like the subtle changes you made as it would be ...I like the subtle changes you made as it would be hard to deeply edit the original. Again, great new title. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10917843282124410508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-54160591778071912014-11-04T10:20:53.699-08:002014-11-04T10:20:53.699-08:00Yujie, I also like your headline change! Farai'...Yujie, I also like your headline change! Farai's original one was great too. You both were really creative. I agree that the original story would have been hard to edit. Nice job with it!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06914354219737276049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-77535073993786401022014-11-03T10:11:46.396-08:002014-11-03T10:11:46.396-08:00The title is perfect for this story. It really exp...The title is perfect for this story. It really expresses how the father feels. You fixed the only errors that I saw. Great job editing!JennFunkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12019608744038730627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-17851065361912067452014-11-03T03:29:45.067-08:002014-11-03T03:29:45.067-08:00I like the new title. The writing was so good in t...I like the new title. The writing was so good in this story, I bet it made it hard to edit.Johanna Greerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253194396023284583noreply@blogger.com