tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post6180885888384996703..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Simple tips to get your energy back and improve your healthRegina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-39096329760835912692015-12-03T20:19:45.196-08:002015-12-03T20:19:45.196-08:00Very informative! "It happens, occasionally.&...Very informative! "It happens, occasionally." -- this sentence could probably be combined with others?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00539629333194858609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-80780181165167032112015-11-30T20:33:06.267-08:002015-11-30T20:33:06.267-08:00Every student at Washburn could benefit from readi...Every student at Washburn could benefit from reading this article!! You talk about places people can go to learn about some of the things covered in you article. I would have liked to see links to those sites. Overall, I thought you did a great good using AP Style Michaela Olberdinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07004288344085279295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-58517297953688237462015-11-30T18:24:22.787-08:002015-11-30T18:24:22.787-08:00Important and helpful information provided. Well w...Important and helpful information provided. Well written. Good job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18105774946599752560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-29131281889667429092015-11-30T16:30:48.391-08:002015-11-30T16:30:48.391-08:00Super informative post! And well-written.Super informative post! And well-written.SydneyLHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547950717844365741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-40712512051230807652015-11-30T08:18:15.593-08:002015-11-30T08:18:15.593-08:00Good article, especially in the winter. Good article, especially in the winter. Trevinedelmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00644014434071085284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-31012389678140178842015-11-30T08:02:26.626-08:002015-11-30T08:02:26.626-08:00"However, it may be worth the effort to catch..."However, it may be worth the effort to catch those extra Z's and not skip meals." I would add this to a paragraph.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04156632950972041591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-936268664872774032015-11-27T21:10:30.441-08:002015-11-27T21:10:30.441-08:00very useful tips for me and I enjoy read your arti...very useful tips for me and I enjoy read your article.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08986458704170497564noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-47445536129923066692015-11-20T08:31:09.033-08:002015-11-20T08:31:09.033-08:00I like the topic, it's definitely something th...I like the topic, it's definitely something that college students can relate to. I liked the breakdown of the paragraphs as well, it makes it clear and easy to follow. Well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15721144001840493511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-62037511334674075942015-11-08T07:06:38.951-08:002015-11-08T07:06:38.951-08:00Great article. It shows you did your research, goo...Great article. It shows you did your research, good job! This is a great topic with everyone being so busy with work and school. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07420193873114415751noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-23448798097374523422015-11-07T13:12:03.699-08:002015-11-07T13:12:03.699-08:00This is something that students would have the des...This is something that students would have the desire to read because it personally affects them. I liked how you broke down what you were saying into sections and gave each section fair recognition and attention. I would reword the headline to say "College students sacrifice healthy lifestyles." Something like that would instantly grab my attention. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18117447719940392999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-80381163340300898162015-11-04T18:57:15.926-08:002015-11-04T18:57:15.926-08:00I agree, I definitely needed a reminder about this...I agree, I definitely needed a reminder about this at this point in the semester! Honestly, I had no idea that bottled water was stripped of all minerals. I think at the beginning of paragraph 7 you can omit "Food." and just begin the paragraph with the following sentence. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-7111610111792331222015-11-01T16:52:08.884-08:002015-11-01T16:52:08.884-08:00Very interesting, and actually something i am goin...Very interesting, and actually something i am going to have to research some more. I seem to ALWAYS be tired and it is no bien! Great article though! well written :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03530664019624256517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-73887184907495637852015-10-28T11:34:56.828-07:002015-10-28T11:34:56.828-07:00Great story! I would change add a colon after Food...Great story! I would change add a colon after Food and omit go after as far as skipping meals go. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08981167437803624417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-76481054530355515882015-10-27T09:21:48.061-07:002015-10-27T09:21:48.061-07:00This is a very relevant article to share, especial...This is a very relevant article to share, especially at this time of the semester. You clearly did research on the topic, and it shows throughout your article. The only changes I would make are in the seventh paragraph, "bod" I'm assuming should be "body," and rewording "If you think you wouldn't mind more energy or happiness in every day, try and make it yourself." I just wasn't sure what you meant by make it yourself. Overall, great article and very well-written!<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546756473875671715noreply@blogger.com