tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post6384181659895854949..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Student rushes to first class of the day Regina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-9922258276505507162014-12-02T20:08:06.403-08:002014-12-02T20:08:06.403-08:00This is seriously a day in my life. No errors that...This is seriously a day in my life. No errors that I could find and the title is very descriptive. It was something that stuck out to me, probably because I find it relatable to every day of my life. Not to mention I'm responsible for another little person who moves like a snail. Every. Day. Struggle.Sarah Seuellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03704460586168182749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-43947991214206066492014-12-02T12:42:36.851-08:002014-12-02T12:42:36.851-08:00The story is very easy to relate too. It is well w...The story is very easy to relate too. It is well written and very descriptive and I enjoyed reading it. You did a good job. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16174036650302809275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-4448047194643085892014-12-01T11:39:57.942-08:002014-12-01T11:39:57.942-08:00I like your story and it is very relatable. I thin...I like your story and it is very relatable. I think the headline is a little boring but I love the fact that you added that it was the first day of class in the headline and I think it should definitely stay there. I"m not sure what you should change it to but if you made it a little more exciting that would make it perfect. It's almost like you need to combine the this headline with the edited headline and then it would be so much better. As far as your story goes I really didn't find very many errors in it and I thought you did a really good job at telling the story and making it interesting and exciting. Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02145349941021806928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-23285618519291988762014-11-25T17:21:34.160-08:002014-11-25T17:21:34.160-08:00Very nice story. I can really relate to it. I like...Very nice story. I can really relate to it. I like your headline, very nice job with your story and the detail you put into it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08342334703162607135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-78425537449075845712014-11-17T12:41:07.468-08:002014-11-17T12:41:07.468-08:00First off, this story was is basically my mornings...First off, this story was is basically my mornings in a nutshell. The only hiccup I saw was the word 'parking stall' . I would change it to a more commonly used word just for aesthetic purposes. But good job. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12021415795650825923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-29278570491806589802014-11-13T11:01:30.864-08:002014-11-13T11:01:30.864-08:00I had to laugh at some point, this is the story of...I had to laugh at some point, this is the story of my life with editing class. As everyone knows, I struggle to convince myself to go to class every time.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00246883693786513243noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-29152776188622677382014-11-11T09:11:48.082-08:002014-11-11T09:11:48.082-08:00I really like the headline. I find myself wanting ...I really like the headline. I find myself wanting to be too fancy with my headlines and yours describes the story perfectly. Great job. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10917843282124410508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-44068319911661457222014-11-10T20:44:45.887-08:002014-11-10T20:44:45.887-08:00If you're anything like me when this happens I...If you're anything like me when this happens I'm sure you tastefully left out a lot of profanity. I enjoyed this story a lot.Brianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12023996784574735793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-30590967554547154502014-11-06T08:43:43.389-08:002014-11-06T08:43:43.389-08:00Good story Jena, I know it's a feeling everyon...Good story Jena, I know it's a feeling everyone can relate with. Maybe a different title, but all in all a good story. :)Johanna Greerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253194396023284583noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-28934128349665030032014-11-06T08:39:36.113-08:002014-11-06T08:39:36.113-08:00Welcome to every morning of my life. It has defini...Welcome to every morning of my life. It has definitely gotten better now that I live closer to campus but I still can't manage to get out the door on time. I found myself intrigued and agreeing with everything you wrote. Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-53018917148360237792014-11-05T22:52:10.618-08:002014-11-05T22:52:10.618-08:00I like your story! I feel like this is also my sto...I like your story! I feel like this is also my story, I always get up late. You describe a lot of details in the story. And I like the adjectives you use in the story. Great job! Zai Yujiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00224768483613303556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-74032455731394870572014-11-05T21:08:38.981-08:002014-11-05T21:08:38.981-08:00This is seriously like the story of my life! If yo...This is seriously like the story of my life! If you haven't noticed I'm late to class, like a lot. You were extremely descriptive with your word choice. Good job!JennFunkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12019608744038730627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-48594197288011572202014-11-05T14:30:57.689-08:002014-11-05T14:30:57.689-08:00Great job, Jena! I think a lot of us will be able ...Great job, Jena! I think a lot of us will be able to relate to this story. I've had those mornings where I either didn't hear my alarm or set it for p.m. like you described. The story flows very nicely, and I really like a lot of the descriptive sentences you used, such as "her pesky dog possessed a bad habit..." It helped me visualize what was happening as I was reading it. I noticed a few minor errors. For example, I think wherever should be one word instead of two (fourth paragraph). Overall, nice job!! I also like your headline. It's descriptive, informative and uses a nice verb!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06914354219737276049noreply@blogger.com