tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post7870470993898960606..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): KBI building opens its doors to the public [Edited]Regina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-36659835800508623362015-12-03T19:48:28.563-08:002015-12-03T19:48:28.563-08:00Nice article! There seems to be an extra spacing b...Nice article! There seems to be an extra spacing between the last paragraph and the one before it, but is that intentional?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00539629333194858609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-16972787619206256132015-12-01T07:46:49.909-08:002015-12-01T07:46:49.909-08:00Good article. Only a few small mistakes.Good article. Only a few small mistakes.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03491079946480679001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-58622763101219271732015-11-30T21:29:04.082-08:002015-11-30T21:29:04.082-08:00There are small mistakes such as replacing "p...There are small mistakes such as replacing "people" with "those" in last paragraph and capitalize "north". Overall, good job!Michaela Olberdinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07004288344085279295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-84093952982878032832015-11-30T19:18:28.045-08:002015-11-30T19:18:28.045-08:00"One hundred" I think you should not spe..."One hundred" I think you should not spell 100. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04156632950972041591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-23162181229312243682015-11-30T08:27:06.480-08:002015-11-30T08:27:06.480-08:00Good edits. Good spacing. Good edits. Good spacing. Trevinedelmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00644014434071085284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-48750609832320783912015-11-30T07:46:21.354-08:002015-11-30T07:46:21.354-08:00Great format and edit! Very easy to read.Great format and edit! Very easy to read.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07420193873114415751noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-38597357834835932722015-11-27T20:29:05.337-08:002015-11-27T20:29:05.337-08:00Good job with the edit! I think the headline is mo...Good job with the edit! I think the headline is more like a normal sentence, not attractive enoughAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08986458704170497564noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-73369782121546994592015-11-24T12:07:16.299-08:002015-11-24T12:07:16.299-08:00I think that this event is very relevant to campus...I think that this event is very relevant to campus, as Amy mentioned. Great edit, Josh. I found this article very informative. In the fourth paragraph, spell out one hundred since it is a numeral larger than 10. Other than that, great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546756473875671715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-20419862724786250632015-11-23T10:17:43.508-08:002015-11-23T10:17:43.508-08:00I still believe this topic is very relevant to cam...I still believe this topic is very relevant to campus. I think the headline is straight to the point and pinpoints the direct focus of the story. I would still move the final paragraph closer to the beginning since the focus is about the grand opening. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18117447719940392999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-66006400466053864022015-11-23T08:08:48.667-08:002015-11-23T08:08:48.667-08:00Other than the suggested edit I mentioned in the o...Other than the suggested edit I mentioned in the original post, this looks good! Both you and Kara are strong writers. Well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15721144001840493511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-41368379270135468502015-11-22T05:39:55.109-08:002015-11-22T05:39:55.109-08:00Edit looks good. I agree with Bree, and I would al...Edit looks good. I agree with Bree, and I would also add the specific dates for the open house instead of just saying Thursday and Friday.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18105774946599752560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-55090760053640362302015-11-20T08:01:42.682-08:002015-11-20T08:01:42.682-08:00Looks great! I think this was edited very well. Ma...Looks great! I think this was edited very well. Maybe clarify that Jerry Farley is the president of Washburn, for clarity purposes. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-28234876561929813452015-11-19T15:17:33.866-08:002015-11-19T15:17:33.866-08:00I don't think the "S" on southeast n...I don't think the "S" on southeast needs to be capitalized. <br />looks good other than that! i like the headline.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03530664019624256517noreply@blogger.com