tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post8722091136948315051..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Washburn University professor holds ‘Movie Night’ for international studentsRegina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-86132937785652356032015-12-03T20:09:42.686-08:002015-12-03T20:09:42.686-08:00Strange spacing, and at the very beginning, it sho...Strange spacing, and at the very beginning, it should be "Since the fall of 2013...", because it's something that began in the past (and still is ongoing).Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00539629333194858609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-57666196075190372952015-12-01T09:10:25.811-08:002015-12-01T09:10:25.811-08:00The spacing is really distracting. It may be your ...The spacing is really distracting. It may be your settings on your computer. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03491079946480679001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-45000189777517077862015-11-30T20:51:53.273-08:002015-11-30T20:51:53.273-08:00The spacing of this article I think is the biggest...The spacing of this article I think is the biggest problem. Other than that, you just had small errors that could be easily fixed. Great Job!Michaela Olberdinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07004288344085279295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-8072446582209645392015-11-30T18:20:27.462-08:002015-11-30T18:20:27.462-08:00Adjust the spacing so that it flows the same throu...Adjust the spacing so that it flows the same throughout the paper. Otherwise, I like the topic. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18105774946599752560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-39286442594215909882015-11-30T16:33:27.268-08:002015-11-30T16:33:27.268-08:00Some formatting issues as far as space and some gr...Some formatting issues as far as space and some grammatical error, but still a great topic.SydneyLHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547950717844365741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-91380964085744553752015-11-30T08:06:33.070-08:002015-11-30T08:06:33.070-08:00The different fonts make it hard to read. And spac...The different fonts make it hard to read. And spacing needs fixed.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04156632950972041591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-4188586334447810542015-11-20T08:45:52.883-08:002015-11-20T08:45:52.883-08:00I like the topic! I didn't know this was going...I like the topic! I didn't know this was going on, it's a great way to get international students involved. There are a few spacing and grammatical errors, but overall I like the story!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15721144001840493511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-25416801340652652342015-11-10T12:46:10.762-08:002015-11-10T12:46:10.762-08:00I really like this article and find this very inte...I really like this article and find this very interesting to know that McFall is doing this for students. I would change "called 'Movie Night' that hold by," to is held by or that holds. Other than that change, it flows nicely but would change formatting, like mentioned above. Overall, great job! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546756473875671715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-21619031847564529812015-11-08T07:31:25.531-08:002015-11-08T07:31:25.531-08:00The first sentence I would say that the movie nigh...The first sentence I would say that the movie night is held by (insert name). Great story and very interesting, good job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07420193873114415751noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-23323836381786160282015-11-07T13:24:20.449-08:002015-11-07T13:24:20.449-08:00I liked that you included quotes in your story. Qu...I liked that you included quotes in your story. Quotes have a way of making the story more relatable. However, there are major formatting edits that need to be made. The fonts and font sizes change throughout which is distracting. Don't say Washburn University in a headline because it takes up too much space. Instead say "WU professors sponsors 'Movie Night' for international students."Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18117447719940392999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-72378904990077325562015-11-04T19:17:32.446-08:002015-11-04T19:17:32.446-08:00I think it is awesome how McFall is doing this for...I think it is awesome how McFall is doing this for students, especially over the weekends! I think this conveys just how great of professors we have at Washburn. I would give credentials to McFall and say what he teaches or simply that he is a professor at Washburn. Great story!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-72253300357757720132015-11-01T16:56:55.193-08:002015-11-01T16:56:55.193-08:00I love the use of quotes, but at the end, I'm ...I love the use of quotes, but at the end, I'm not sure if the formatting is just translation form where you typed this, and where its posted. If not, maybe make the last couple lines read more like a story. Great job though, and very interesting story! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03530664019624256517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-668032775788363782015-10-28T11:24:51.562-07:002015-10-28T11:24:51.562-07:00I loved your incorporation of quotes. My one corre...I loved your incorporation of quotes. My one correction would be just to fix the spacing and font issues to make it more readable. Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08981167437803624417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-75006143639427841392015-10-27T23:21:37.339-07:002015-10-27T23:21:37.339-07:00The spacing on your post is a little wonky. "...The spacing on your post is a little wonky. "He enjoy and thankful for the time that with his students" You could say He enjoys and is thankful for the time that he spends with his students. Cathryne Klisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156237965938779149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-39185956887793775542015-10-27T18:44:31.450-07:002015-10-27T18:44:31.450-07:00Wonderful job with the quotes and summaries. It fl...Wonderful job with the quotes and summaries. It flowed very nicely and had a solid ending. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11693627680739888458noreply@blogger.com