tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post889331803745576639..comments2023-06-01T05:58:51.997-07:00Comments on Editing (MM422): Nothing is as touching as parents’ loveRegina Cassellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04060298634467517339noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-17131123200921994872014-12-02T13:01:27.846-08:002014-12-02T13:01:27.846-08:00I like how descriptive the story is. A few mistake...I like how descriptive the story is. A few mistakes but the story is interesting. Nice job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16174036650302809275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-86020577549743885232014-11-06T13:27:36.279-08:002014-11-06T13:27:36.279-08:00The descriptions in the story were great. Everyone...The descriptions in the story were great. Everyone else has said pretty much what I would say.Brianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12023996784574735793noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-28380895759560128422014-10-22T21:34:15.475-07:002014-10-22T21:34:15.475-07:00I can picture watching this happen in an airport. ...I can picture watching this happen in an airport. You did a great job of describing everyone's emotions. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10917843282124410508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-45486322438942758682014-10-14T09:48:22.966-07:002014-10-14T09:48:22.966-07:00Good job and great details! You did an awesome job...Good job and great details! You did an awesome job like everyone else said grammar will improve over time. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-67140877259087261972014-10-13T20:14:01.749-07:002014-10-13T20:14:01.749-07:00Like the others have said, there are some grammar ...Like the others have said, there are some grammar mistakes, but those are things that will improve with time! Overall, great job with the details!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07879780447247621474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-5519804141110948482014-10-09T15:23:58.292-07:002014-10-09T15:23:58.292-07:00The story is very heartfelt, I really enjoyed it. ...The story is very heartfelt, I really enjoyed it. I know writing in a second language has to be tough, but this is really well done. I saw a few changes I would make, but I really liked the story and a lot of your word choices!Sarah Seuellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03704460586168182749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-49262371817312860702014-10-08T19:46:42.831-07:002014-10-08T19:46:42.831-07:00Looking beyond the grammatical errors, I think thi...Looking beyond the grammatical errors, I think this was a good story. I take it this is what happened when you left home?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00246883693786513243noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-20987729767052661632014-10-08T19:24:42.789-07:002014-10-08T19:24:42.789-07:00This is a good story. There are some mistakes but ...This is a good story. There are some mistakes but I couldn't imagine having to write stories like these in a second language. You did good.JennFunkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12019608744038730627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-30154365113059235642014-10-02T17:39:09.374-07:002014-10-02T17:39:09.374-07:00There are a few grammar mistakes, but that's w...There are a few grammar mistakes, but that's what these blog posts are for :) You managed to use a lot of details but you also had many important quotes! Good job! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12137679357718093245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-24169310073521461402014-10-02T12:40:31.937-07:002014-10-02T12:40:31.937-07:00I also like your headline! A couple of suggestions...I also like your headline! A couple of suggestions I have are to pay close attention to comma placement and when you need to use connecting words, and also to make sure sure you use complete sentences. This was a really great story and I enjoyed reading it! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06914354219737276049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373769128375739503.post-54044005408511780672014-10-02T09:16:24.053-07:002014-10-02T09:16:24.053-07:00Good title. Needs a few edits, but it's a good...Good title. Needs a few edits, but it's a good story. Very moving! Good job Yujie. :)Johanna Greerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253194396023284583noreply@blogger.com