Chartwells has been known for not many good things. Students
argue that along with the lack of selection and high prices in the union,
Chartwells has to cater things instead of a different company. For example, if
there was a banquet in the Washburn A/B room and whoever was holding the
banquet wanted Hog Wild to cater it, Chartwells would not allow it. Whatever is
catered on campus, comes from chartwells.
On top of a catering issue, a domino effect takes place as
soon as you select which meal plan you want. If you select the highest meal
plan while living in the Living Learning Center, you basically need to eat two
and a half meals there everyday in order to get down to the price you need at
the end of the semester because after the second semester the money does not
carry over. With having to eat multiple meals there everyday, you begin to
become sick-and-tired of the lack of selection choices. Sandwiches are only
good so many times and greasy food and pasta are not something to have every
day.
At the end of the day, an argument could be made that
Chartwells is really screwing over students from the moment you click on the
meal plan that you want.
Chartwells has been known for not many good things. try to say " Chartwells is not known for good things" or something... and then in the second paragraph where it says "Chartwells would not allow it. Whatever is catered on campus, comes from chart wells." I would say "the contract between WU and CW does not allow this" and would omit the last part, as its kind of redundant. Good article though, as a person who opposes chartwells very much !
ReplyDeleteAlso, the headline... remove the "ING" at the end
DeleteI agree with David! Also I would capitalize "Union" in the second paragraph, or call it the Memorial Union since that is its official name. I feel like you have some opinion in this article, but I definitely have to agree with you! I wish we wouldn't have signed that contract with Chartwells.
ReplyDeleteThe headline shouldn't have effecting, it should just say have a lasting affect. First paragraph first sentence I would change the wording of Chartwells and good things. Good article and I agree that we shouldn't have signed that contract!
ReplyDelete"With having to eat multiple meals there everyday, you begin to become sick-and-tired of the lack of selection choices" This is an opinion, you could say some students might, but you can't just assume the reader would get sick and tired (although it is probably true)
ReplyDeletePlease rephrase or delete the final sentence. It's really not professional to include the phrase "screwing over" in a newspaper. Headline could be improved by saying "Chartwells remains as Washburn's food provider." The lede could be rephrased as well. "To some, that did not go over well" doesn't make sense.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! I think this article is very relevant to write about, seeing as this is a very prominent issue on our campus. Even though I completely agree that they are "screwing over" students, I would rephrase this to a more professional term. Just for the sake of it being printed, other than that, like I said, I completely agree. I would also change the headline, it doesn't correlate with both adding in ing. Otherwise, great job!
ReplyDeleteGreat story! I would reword the sentence "Chartwells has been known for not many good things," but other than that, it was a good story! Well done!
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ReplyDeletegood story and topic. I think headline can be work better
ReplyDeleteRelevant topic. Good journalism.
ReplyDeleteHeadline needs rewritten. But good, relevant topic I think a lot of students would enjoy reading.
ReplyDeleteI agree with what everyone said. Rewrite the headline and fix your minor errors. Otherwise interesting topic.
ReplyDelete"On top of a catering issue, a domino effect takes place as soon as you select which meal plan you want." I would reword this and take out "on top of the catering". I agree with this story though.
ReplyDeleteThe last sentence in the first paragraph could be reworded and placed in a different spot. I also think there are many opinions in this article as well. I think you will be happy to know that Washburn is changing their existing meal plans. Though there were some mistakes I thought you did a good job.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting topic. Even though I do not eat on campus it is interesting to see what is happening. Like everyone else said rewrite headline.
ReplyDeleteDidn't know about this catering monopoly! Make sure to capitalize "Chartwells" each time.
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