Washburn Student Government Association will be tabling in Memorial Union on Thursday, Oct. 29, 2015, for the It's On Us Pledge. This year there has been a sexual assault task force implemented into the senate that promotes awareness, implements safety precautions and provides a safe atmosphere for students on our campus. The task force is bringing the pledge to our campus because it is designed for individual's to take responsibility for themselves and their actions, while also taking responsibility for not being a bystander to sexual assault. WSGA collaborated with Dr. Sharon Sullivan in efforts to create this event. There will be whistles given out when students sign the pledge to promote safety and awareness.
Thursday night at 6 p.m. is the Take Back the Night march and vigil. There are only 10 cities in the United States that are hosts of this event. Topeka, Kansas, was one of the lucky few to be chosen this year. The march will begin at 6 p.m. and then the vigil will take place following the march. This event was created to empower survivors and community members to feel safe on the streets that they live in.
The last event on Thursday, Oct. 29, will be at 8:15 p.m. Following Take Back the Night, WSGA will also be having a movie night featuring the Disney Channel movie, "Halloweentown." The event will be held in Henderson 100 and there will be refreshments for the taking.
For more about the It's On Us Pledge or Take Back the Night, click on the names and it will take you to their websites.
Add a comma after "safety precautions" in paragraph 1.
ReplyDeleteI would suggest ending paragraph 2 with "on their streets." You don't need the extra words, but that's my own preference.
I found the article interesting and informative, as well as journalistic!
Add a comma after "safety precautions" in paragraph 1.
ReplyDeleteI would suggest ending paragraph 2 with "on their streets." You don't need the extra words, but that's my own preference.
I found the article interesting and informative, as well as journalistic!
This year a sexual assault task force was implemented into the senate that promotes awareness, implements safety precautions and provides a safe atmosphere for students on our campus.
ReplyDeleteI am not sure, but I think has been is passive voice. It would be better to say This year there has been a sexual assault task force implemented into the senate that promotes awareness, implements safety precautions and provides a safe atmosphere for students on our campus.
I would omit the word lucky before lucky few to be chosen this year in the second paragraph. I read it as sarcastic, which I know isn't how you meant it. Also, break the first paragraph up into two paragraphs, it is a little lengthy for a news article. Otherwise, great job!
ReplyDeleteLike the others have commented, check your wording. Remove unnecessary adjectives and other words. Interesting article though :)
ReplyDeleteI thought this was very informative and well written! I would give credentials to Dr. Sharon Sullivan and say who she is.
ReplyDeleteThe first paragraph is WAY too long. Define your lede and let it stand alone in the leading paragraph. After reading the story I realized the headline does not tell us what the story will be about so the headline should be rewritten. Maybe say "Washburn strives to promote assault awareness."
ReplyDeleteGreat job! Interesting article and you can tell you did your research on the events. I would make the first paragraph two because it's pretty long.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I like that you provided links! I agree with Amy, the headline should reflect what the article is about. Other than that, this was a very informative and well thought out article!
ReplyDeleteGood story, but the headline is hard to attractive audiences
ReplyDeleteI think it is awesome that you have links to more information. Great story. I would split up paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteWell done! Good last sentence to add interest.
ReplyDeleteThe article is great, but it would be beneficial to have a headline that enticed your audience a bit more!
ReplyDeleteGreat information to know. I would adjust the story like everyone suggested. Otherwise well done.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on grammar! I was not aware of these events and I'm glad they were brought up! I think the headline could have been a little better
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I would just change the headline.
ReplyDeleteNice job! I would explain at the beginning what "It's On Us Pledge" is about.
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