Thursday, November 20, 2014

A night when from awesome, to crappy, to amazing all in one hour

              As I sit here all cuddled up and warm in my sweatpants, a hoodie, fuzzy socks, and a big fluffy blanket around me, I think of how wonderful my day just was. The heater just kicked on and mmm… it feels so warm and cozy. The room was filled with silence, the only thing I could hear was the heater turning on and it became a quite calming and soothing sound, especially at the moment. Thankfully I am the only one home and the only light around me some candles flickering on the coffee table. I love nights like this when my roommates are gone and I can do some homework in peace.
 

               Just out of nowhere my roommates and their friends magically get off work early and ruin everything. The first thing they do is turn on all the lights, and then turn the TV on to ESPN. Don’t get me wrong, I love sports, but I was really enjoying my quite time and it had just started, to then be ruined in less than ten minutes. The only thing that kept me from going insane was the fact that my boyfriend, one of my roommates, brought me a Jimmy John’s sub and some curly fries from Arby’s; two of my favorite things. He also brought me a Pepsi which is my favorite pop, or as he calls it, soda. I thought my night was completely ruined by them coming home and disrupting my peace but food can calm me down instantly and it always makes me smile.
 

                  I also then realized that they came home for the Chiefs vs. Raiders game that I forgot about and was super pumped to watch. My boyfriend is from California and is a die hard Raiders fan, and I’ve always hated the Chiefs so naturally we were the only two in the room cheering for them to win. What finally made my night the bomb was when the Raiders won over the Chiefs, for three reasons; the Raiders have sucked all year and this was their first win, I hate the Chiefs and watching all the fans post on Facebook about the game was hilarious, and my boyfriend won us $70 because of this game, which we highly intended to lose. So one awesome night turned to a crappy night then turned to an amazing night. 

Story by Megan Beck 

13 comments:

  1. Title is a little long, it's not in third person and there are a few grammatical errors. But it's definitely a relate-able story. I'm with you on the food can calm me down thing. LOL. Good job. :)

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  2. It does not flow as I would like it, but is a good story! I have roommates and I understand the love/hate relationship it sometimes is.

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  3. The story needs to be in third person and there are a few errors but it is a good story.

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  4. I also think the headline is a little long, but nice story. Great job!

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  5. I think you meant to put went in the headline instead of when. But other than that a great job.

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  6. As others pointed out, the story needs to be int he third person. I also think the headline is a little long. I did like your story, even thought I'm a Chiefs fan. Good job,

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  7. I can't really think of anything that others haven't already said. There were some errors with comma placement and sentence structure, and it should have been in the third person. It was an entertaining story to read, though!!

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  8. You captured a great little moment that some often overlook. Everyone already pointed out the major things that I noticed. I related to the story the whole time. Great job!

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  9. I agree with everyone else's feedback. The headline was long and it didn't read like a headline, but good job entertaining the reader.

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  10. I think everyone pretty much pointed out what could be fixed in your story. The headline is a long and would probably make a better book title. But I think your content and attention to details are spot on.

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  11. I have nothing more to add that hasn't been said. I would say I like your story, but I was at the bar screaming at the television during that game and can't, in good faith, agree with you. That game was bullshit.

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  12. Other than the headline being a little long you have a good story. I enjoyed reading it even though it was a little tough to read being a chiefs fan.

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  13. I agree with Tyler and Brian... I'm a Chief's fan, and I'm still a little sore over that game. I don't have much else to say.

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