“The buffet was really worth the money, and was the best
food I have ever had at Washburn,” said Logan Runnebaum, freshman nursing
major.
The buffet was $10 at the door or $9 in
advance. The target audience for the event was all students, faculty and staff. The food provided was the traditional style Thanksgiving feast. Some of the food included was, turkey, ham, potatoes and cream
corn. For dessert, there were a variety of different kinds of pie. The pumpkin pie was everyone's favorite portion.
The buffet was a great hit with all of the students, faculty and staff that attended.
There was an abundance of people who were in attendance. It
is the best buffet that Washburn offers all year; all of the seats were full from
the start to the end of the buffet.
“I always miss the buffet and really wish I could have
attended it,” said David Cox, senior mass media major.
Thanksgiving break starts Wednesday, Nov. 25,
and class resumes Monday, Nov. 30. With holiday cooking and black Friday shopping coming
up, it is nice to be able to go eat at the buffet without actually having to make it.
The only thing I see is "Black Friday" Not sure if the B should be cap or not. I know its a specific Friday, therefore I think it may need to be....but not sure, and of course it's no where in that fabulous book we paid $383848 for. #winning
ReplyDeleteThis story is very hard to read. It would be easier to read if you put spaces in between the paragraphs so it didn't look like one big massive chunk of text.
ReplyDeleteGreat edit! I noticed you adjusted the part about ticket prices. The only thing I would suggest would be to indent paragraphs so it breaks up the text a little. Otherwise, well done!
ReplyDeleteAll the edits that were made really really helped! Nice work! I do agree with Kara in that there needs to be divisions between the paragraphs so that the reader doesn't have such a difficult time reading through the story.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the traditional news style.
ReplyDeleteI would just space out the text so it is easier to read. Otherwise, good edit.
ReplyDeleteGood job. I would make the format easier to read and smaller paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteText was hard to read. I would personally change the headline. Good edit.
ReplyDeleteSpacing between paragraphs would be nice!
ReplyDeleteGood edit! I agree there need spacing between paragraphs.
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