It was a beautiful Saturday afternoon. The first Saturday she had gotten off from work in a long time. The weather was perfect; it was sunny but not too hot and not too cold. As she sat in the car outside Prairie View golf course in Topeka, Kansas, she found that she was nervous to be golfing with this new man in her life. She didn't want to embarrass herself or look silly in front of him.
She waited patiently for him to rent the golf cart and pay the green fees and then they headed to the first hole. After stretching and applying sunscreen, she walked up to the tee box, put the ball on the tee, and got in position. She swung the golf club for the first time in years, and to her dismay she totally missed the ball. She looked over at Justin timidly and they both burst out laughing. He offered her some advice to help, and on the second swing she hit the ball and it landed on the green.
As she and Justin continued golfing through the next 8 holes they each got a little better. By the time they got to hole 9 they were joking around and giving each other a hard time. Since they had decided to not to keep score they decided it was a tie, even though she knew he had won. As they drove the golf cart back to the club house, she felt as though their second date had been a success.
I really like the title. The story in general was sweet and the title suited it perfectly.
ReplyDeleteAdorable. You guys are so cute! I really like the title as well, someone is going to have trouble editing this!
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure if there should be punctuation in the title but it fit the story well. This was a wonderful moment you were able to capture for your story.
ReplyDeleteI liked it! I couldn't find any grammatical errors.
ReplyDeleteI thought the story was short and sweet. Captured a brief moment in time well, but I would suggest a different headline.
ReplyDeleteThat was a great story. Sounds like a very memorable moment and you did a great job describing it.
ReplyDeleteWell that just sounds like an all-around pleasant afternoon. Good job with the descriptions.
ReplyDeleteGreat job describing this moment! I think you did a fantastic job!
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job describing exactly what is going on, step by step. It's easy to follow along!
ReplyDeleteInteresting story! I like your description.
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