Monday, October 19, 2015

Washburn student attendance lacks at football games (EDITED)

The stands at football games this year are looking like a morgue due to lack of participation from students. 

I have began to notice a trend at football games within my four years of attending Washburn University. Every year the first football game always starts off with a full student section. The stands are filled with students with painted chests who are full of Washburn spirit. As the season continues, the crowd dwindles down with every home game. 

There also seems to be a correlation of how the Ichabod's season goes and the student attendance at games. Although when homecoming comes around, the stands will be filled with fans once more. The only section that seems to stay consistent is the alumni section. The dedicated alumni never seem to have missed a game since they graduated 20 years ago. 

Greek life usually lasts the longest in attendance at games but in the end, they seem to dissipate as well. At the beginning of the season, the hill where the fraternities and sororities sit usually starts off with all of them showing their letters and filling the hill. Though one can see they have a lot of school spirit, it tends to die off. After awhile, it seems that they all stay outside and tailgate or not even show up. 

In past years, the cheerleaders would rotate each quarter to cheer for the student section. Since participation is lacking, they no longer go to the other side of the field. This restricts the cheerleaders from interacting with the band who have always been the loudest people in the stands. 

With homecoming being this upcoming week, there is hope to have the stands full so the crowd could cheer the Ichabods on to a victory. The cheerleaders would love more than anything to cheer for the students of Washburn University.

16 comments:

  1. Great edit! I thought the paragraphs were broken up very nicely. It was very readable.

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  2. Ain't this the truth. It's such a joke sometimes how much this school lacks spirit. This seems to be edited well and has great content!

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  3. I love the edits you did! It was a good article to begin with. I think breaking up the paragraphs made it easier to read. And I like the fact that even though this article is calling students out for not participating, it doesn't seem like the writer is attacking those students. Well done!

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  4. Great article Bree. I also think breaking up the paragraphs made it easier to read.

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  5. Great article and great edit! You made the necessary changes to the article to make it very readable. The only thing I would suggest is putting a comma after "Although," other than that I don't see any mistakes. Good job!

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  6. Saying "every year" and "always" in the same sentence is a little repetitive.
    Ex: "Every year, the first football game starts off with a full student section."
    Great re-write at the beginning of paragraph three. I like the word choice!

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  7. I have began to notice a trend at football games within my four years of attending Washburn University. I would just say I have noticed a trend at football games within my four years of attending Washburn University.

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  8. I can see why WU lacks spirit, it has for a very long time been seen as a non-traditional college. As a current, and life, non-trad student, school spirit is not on the top of my list, because other responsibilities take rank. But well written, just a few grammatical things.

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  9. Very good edits - I like how you changed the headline to still incorporate a form of the word "attend." You still need to delete yourself from the story. You're talking from a student perspective, but cannot make it obvious by including "I" or you'll lose your sense of objectivity.

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  10. I like the new headline. There still is the problem of having the word "I" in the story; it doesn't present an objective point of view, but other than that, good edits!

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  11. Good edits. I liked the original headline, but this one is just as good. Still a little objective, but overall good job!

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  12. Good edits. I liked the original headline, but this one is just as good. Still a little objective, but overall good job!

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  13. Good job on the edit. Flows well.

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  14. You did great editing the original! It flows well and uses proper terminology

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  15. Great edit with this article. and I agree with Sydney, the orginal headline is better.

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  16. Great edit! Just one thing, it should be "I have begun to notice..."

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