Friday, October 30, 2015

Washburn University professor holds ‘Movie Night’ for international students (edit)

           Since the fall of 2013, there has been a regular activity called ‘Movie Night’ held by Washburn faculty member Larry McFall.
McFall holds the event at his house every Friday night.
            “In talking with my Intensive English students before and after classes, I learned that many of them really enjoyed movies,” said McFall. “I thought the movie night might provide a fun, but safe social outlet for the student to keep them working on their English.”
            McFall also holds Sunday afternoon culture discussions for international students to improve their English. IN recent semesters, however, he has been teaching basic level students who need a higher level of English to appreciate the movie discussions. So in recent semesters the students who came to the event heard about it through word of mouth.
            “They aren’t my students,” said McFall. “I’m actually very happy about this because I know in some cultures a student might feel obligated to come to an activity sponsored by his or her teacher. We want the students who come to come out of their own desire and not a sense of obligation to their teacher.”
            The hardest thing for McFall and his family is saying goodbye to so many friends that they have come to know. Most of the students they meet are only here for a semester or two. He may never see his friends who have gone back to China, Japan, Saudi Arabia, or wherever their home may be, ever again.
            “Saying goodbye is one of the most difficult things in this life,” McFall said.
He also sais that he is thankful and that he enjoys the time with the students.   

16 comments:

  1. Good Edit! I like how you put the last part in paragraph form.

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  2. This was a great edit! In the third paragraph, you started one sentence with in recent semesters and the next as so in recent semesters, which is a tad redundant. Other than that, good job! Much easier to read!

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  3. Great edit!! I like how you paraphrased some of the quotes and made it easier to read. I also like that you took out the part of the quote when McFall talks about death because I don't think that was what he was meaning.

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  4. You have the word in capitalized and "He also sais that he is thankful and that he enjoys the time with the students." Come on Trevin, spell check catches that error! :)

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  5. You have the word in capitalized and "He also sais that he is thankful and that he enjoys the time with the students." Come on Trevin, spell check catches that error! :)

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  6. Select a new verb for the headline because you "hold" something in your hand. It's not suitable in regards to an event. The formatting was improved a great deal which makes it easier to read. A few spelling errors though like Cathryne pointed out.

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  7. Great edit! I don't understand the formatting at the beginning and into the second. Otherwise, great job!

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  8. There were a few grammatical errors such as the word "sais" in the very last sentence, but other than that, this was a great edit! Good job!

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  9. Very nice edit, minus a few typos. Does Movie Night need apostrophes?

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  10. Nice edit. make the story more interesting

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  11. I think the headline is just a little long for the length of the story. But the edits made this story flow better than the original.

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  12. Nice edit. Easier to read and flows better.

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  13. This second draft is much better. There is still some formatting issues.

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  14. Still some small spelling and grammar mistakes but overall I thought it was good!

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  15. Good edits. Still some grammar issues.

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  16. Small mistakes here and there, and the font/spacing looked strange throughout!

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