Friday, November 27, 2015

WU works for students’ safety (Edited)


Parents and Students can feel comfort by knowing that Washburn University strives to keep safety a priority on and off campus. A big part of the process is to let students realizing that they are in charge of their own safety.

Washburn University Police Department Officers patrol around campus all the time by bikes, foot or car. They check in and check out for each buildings throughout campus and parking lots.

For those times when police officers are not in the area or in sight, Washburn Police Department. also monitor 13 “ Help Phones” placed strategically on campus along heavily traveled walkways. All of these “Help Phones” could immediately dial the WU Police Department when receiver is picked up. Also, a blue light is mounted above the phone boxes to help receivers easy to spot at night.

Washburn campus also has an emergency alert notification system, called iAlert. That is used to communicate important alerts and emergency response information. The system is for Washburn University only.

According to the Washburn website, all users will receive an email at their Washburn email address when an iAlert is sent. Users can also choose to receive iAlert via text message and telephone calls by enrolling their telephone numbers. You can visits Washburn website for more information about register and receive iAlert.

Using free transportation is another way that making students stay safe. Students can ride the Topeka Metro bus for free with their Washburn Student ID card. Besides, students can take a taxi get home after late night on the town. The only downside is that the buses would stop running at 6:10 p.m. Rather than driving drunk and putting yourself in danger, Washburn wants to make it easy to make the smart decision. When you or your friends need a safe ride, just dial 267-3777, the dispatcher will ask for your ID number and send a free taxi to take you home.

Recently, theft tends to be happened often in Topeka and Washburn campus. You can register your valuables with either the Washburn or Topeka Police to increase your chance of item recovery in the event of theft.

Fire Prevention is often overlooked when examining safety precautions each year college and university students experience fire-related emergencies. There are several specific causes for fires on campus, cooking, intentionally set fires, overloaded power strips and open flame. It is important that both off campus and on campus students understand fire risks and know the preventative measures that could save their lives. Recommendations for fire, or general safety, in all types of housing can be found by talking to a person in charge, either an RA or the landlord.

12 comments:

  1. Some of the spacing looks a little off, for example "Keep" is split on two lines with no hyphen? I am not sure if this is just an error in the way my browser is loading it or not. Other than that, great job editing!

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  2. I agree with David on the spacing, it makes it very difficult to read. Also, you said "each buildings" needs to be changed to each building. Great job!

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  3. "All of these “Help Phones” could immediately dial the WU Police Department when receiver is picked up[...]" using could makes this phrase conditional, meaning that the phone may or may not call, when in fact, unless something is wrong with the phone it WILL call WU police.

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  4. I agree, the spacing needs to be fixed because it makes the reader have to go back reread certain words.

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  5. Good edits. As for the headline, my question would be "works for" what? I would change it to a clearer verb. Do not capitalize both students and parents in the lede. On the ending of some of your lines your words are separated so that either needs to be fixed or hyphens need to be added.

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  6. There are some spacing and grammatical errors, such as "using free transportation is another way that making students stay safe." That could be changed to "Free transportation is another way students can stay safe." Other than that, well done!

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  7. "Students" in the first sentence needs to be lowercase. "Officers" should be lowercase also. Just work on the spacing as well. Other than that, cool story.

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  8. Good job! I do agree that the spacing is off or something.

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  9. Do not capitalize both students and parents in the lead. There are some spacing errors but is a good story.

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  10. Nice edit! I was going to say what Justin did, make sure students is lower cased. Other than that, like I said before, great edit!

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  11. Good edit! There are some issues with words cutting off and spacing.

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  12. Not a bad edit, but I would definitely spell out "Washburn University" in the headline!

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